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“You look so cute!” Gwen cooed as Ben crossed her arms over her chest.

Ben wasn't sure how she had pulled it off but this was the fifth outfit sh had tried on, and was the girliest of th bunch. The pink blouse was a affront to everything masculine and the flowing pleated skirt and white panties made her feel like such a pansy. He huffed as Gwen pulled her back into the dressing room once more and got her into another outfit. When the sound of screaming patron interrupted their little girl party Ben was out the door in nothing but panties and a training bra before Gwen could blink. The store was empty as everyone has already fled, only Max was outside to greet them.

“Ben,” He coughed, “Might what to put something on.”

cheeks flushed Ben ran back in, slipping into his original clothes quickly just as a giant frog leaps past the store.

“Animo,” Ben growls as he raises the Omnitrix the face glowing green and ready, “It's Hero time!”

With a quick slam Four Arms emerged, pausing a moment Four Arms looked himself over, “Alright! I'm a guy again!”

He exclaimed before rushing off to battle. Gwen emerged a moment later to stand next to Max.

“Was that a male Four Arms?” she wondered.

“Seems so, we won't know until he times out if he'll remain so, but my guess is because of the mix of alien technology and magic he'll only remain a girl until he assumes one of the regular aliens.”

Gwen pouts, “Aw man, I was starting to like having a sister.”

Max smiles, “Well we better get going before Ben gets himself in over his head.”

Gwen nods, “Wait for us Ben!”

End 10.
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kebarton Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012
I though it should have been longer maybe you could make a alternate ending or an extended version like add ben being a girl for a whole day or more.
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NekoLLX Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Student Filmographer
thats what Jen 10,000 and Ben 10 Alien force do
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Juggalo-King Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2010
i waan read more
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NekoLLX Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2010  Student Filmographer
well there is ben 10 alien force and ben 10k follow ups
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Juggalo-King Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2010
link please or name those storys are under iwanna read where that story left off
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NekoLLX Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2010  Student Filmographer
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tgfan Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2009
will you please make more. it is really interesting.
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tgfan Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2009
will you please make more. it is really interesting.
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NekoLLX Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2009  Student Filmographer
well there is the Alien force and Ben 10 sequals
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tgfan Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2009
what i mean is that your story seems unfinished that it needs more. thats just my perspective.
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0ArmoredSoul0 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This seems like a two-parter, and there's no real conclusion.
Also, there are scenes missing in the story that make it choppy and somewhat hard to follow.
Not to mention the spelling and grammar faults that pop up occasionally.
I would like to see an actual end, where Charmcaster gets what's coming to her and Ben gets turned back to normal.
Just my opinion.
Still, it's a brilliant and really quite original take on a somewhat overused idea that I would love to see more of.
Please, do continue.
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NekoLLX Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2009  Student Filmographer
he does get turned back, that was the implication of going four arms, back to normal.

And it sets the stage for the follow up stories, kinda wanted Charmcasters curse to back fire on her.
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0ArmoredSoul0 Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ahhhhh, that would make more sense.
It just ended so strangely, almost disjointed.
It didn't really seem like a good ending.
And I didn't know there were follow up stories.
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NekoLLX Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2009  Student Filmographer
Jen ten Alien force and Jen 10,000
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0ArmoredSoul0 Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ah.
I need to read those now.
^^
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MitchellTF Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2008
Um, I really liked this story, but I don't mean to be rude...

It's kinda...short, and this ending doesn't really hit a 'climax'. It just...stops. It might help if we knew whether or not Grandpa was right.
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NekoLLX Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2008  Student Filmographer
well i wanted to kind of be a lost episode so i sort of implies things go back to normal
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MitchellTF Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2008
Ah. But it still needs that big dramatic climax. It feels like two stories pulled into one.

There's the "Gwen Turned into a catgirl story", which ends properly, but the "Ben turns into a girl" story kinda just putters out...
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NekoLLX Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2008  Student Filmographer
so what do a epiloge with ben bouncing back after the fight as a boy again?
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MitchellTF Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2008
Actually, IMHO, it would be easier to just rewrite the latter story, and switch out for a more 'climatic' villain. Say, Charmcaster had an emergency back-up summon or something?

Army of department store mannnequins she controls somehow? That connects the latter half with the former much better.
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NekoLLX Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2008  Student Filmographer
well the idea is its not supose to be connected its "oh dang i'm stuck as a girl" then "back to normal"
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MitchellTF Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2008
That's...sorta what got me a bit 'meh' about it...It comes across as bad writing, kills dramatic tension, and causes the story to not climax, just...putter out.

(Note: I only say mean things like this to people I like...You are a good writer, hence why I'm criticizing you.)
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NekoLLX Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2008  Student Filmographer
well if you watch Ben ten sometimes they end a episode with a "Brand new adventure" just to show things back to normal. thats what i was going for here. So i don't want to have charmmaster it has to be a totally un related adventure that sets us back on track
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Regreme Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2008
Cute.^_^ And interesting.:D
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